Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: Zombie 05.ass
Workraw: [Zero-Raws] Kore wa Zombie Desuka Of the Dead - 05 (MX 1280x720 x264 AAC).avi

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1
Well then, while I'm back at my village, I'll be leaving everything else on your care.
Well then, while I'm back at my village, I'll leave the rest to you, Haruna.
*might sound better in English*

3
To protect Hellscythe-dono and preventing Ayumu from doing those perverted things to her.
I'd like you to keep an eye on Ayumu, so that he won't do anything perverted to Hellscythe-dono.
*protect==> keep an eye on, so the sentence changes*

6
It's like you're her Onee-san now.
It's like you're her big sister now.
*I'd translate onee-san here. Goes for 7 as well*

7
Onee-san...
Her big sister...

11
As the peaceful days come to an end, terrible presage looms from beyond.
As the peaceful days come to an end, a terrible disaster is about to happen.
*I heard the latter part as something like "jihen ga okorantoshiteita", which is the above*

12
{sign} 
{sign} Yes, it's hyped up every year.
*see previous episode for consistency?*

13
I was suppose to be working today...
I was supposed to be working today...

15
I'm sure the elders have something in mind.
I'm sure the higher-ups had something in mind.

16
Since there are many strange happenings in that city.
As too many mysterious incidents occur in that city.

22
Excess flab are our enemy!
Excess flab is our enemy!
*uncountable, but still singular in grammar*

31
From the looks of it, you sure peeled them off cleanly.
Nevertheless, you sure peel them off cleanly.
*alt: remove "off"*

34
{sign}I hate the white parts of the orange.
{sign}White parts of the mandarin are my enemy.
*literal. also, mikan is a mandarin (orange). An orange itself is "orenji"*

38
The pith of the orange can be bitter at time, right?
The pith of a mandarin tastes quite bitter, after all.

42
*Sign needs CV fix*

56
Did I just allow my perverted thoughts overcome me?
Did I just try to do something extremely perverted?
*literal translation*

57
*Sign needs CV fix*

59
No. No, no! {or "No, hell no!"}
No, hell no!
*Being repetitive is bad.*

60
I shouldn't have any impure thoughts!
This is nothing but a mere innocent conduct!
*trying to fit this sentence with 56, same context*

61
As this rate, her body will be cold from the sweat.
At this rate, her body will become cold from the sweat.

64
It's not like I want to touch Eu's body at all!
It's not like I want to touch Eu's hot body at all!
*there's a pun here, with "hoteru eu", meaning Eu, who's feeling hot. You can disregard this sentence fix*

66
**Meditation Mode!
*That's OK like this. It's the first step of Buddhism, (zazen) ...Just remove the asterisks*

67
I'm freeing myself from my earthly desire!
I'll attain enlightenment!
*is what he actually says, up to the editor, since the first sounds actually nicer in context*

68
Ah, something's stiff!
**

70
I have reach enlightenment.
I should've attained enlightenment.

75
*Sign needs CV fix*

84
**There's suppose to be two guiding lines here.
There are supposed to be two guiding lines over here.
*eng grammar*

88
*Sign needs CV fix*

90
Warm-me-up with your body, Onii-chan.
Warm~me~up with your body, Onii-chan.
*idunno*

92
*I'd keep it like that, I think it's another pun: Wooden Horse (mokuba) and Idiot (baka) making Mokubaka*

93
But... But... {or "But that's because..."}
But...y'know...
*something like this*

103
It's like you're her Onee-san now.
It's like you're her big sister now.
*idem*

106
Will it be okay to bring her to a human doctor?
Is it okay to bring her to a human doctor?

115
Residents of the Underworld only catch sickness specified for them.
Residents of the Underworld can only catch an underwordly illness.
*little bit more liberal to grab more context*

119
Please, she looks like she's suffering.
Please! She looks like she's suffering.

130
With a lot more passion! With a lot more speed!!
More passionate! More swiftly!

136
*nothing wrong with this sentence*

141
Go burn in hell, you retarded perverted horse!
*added more aggressiveness, not needed of course, but it'd sound the same as the previous one*

142
Perverted Chiba == Foolish Perverted Horse
*I'm afraid we're missing the pun here as non-natives*

143
I'm pretty tired as well,
It's quite tiresome for me as well,

145
What are you trying to do with such perverted look?!
What are you trying to do with such a perverted look?!
*missing article*

166
but isn't this is the f-first time we're {\i1}this{\i0} close with each other?
but isn't this is the f-first time we're {\i1}this{\i0} close to each other?

188
You sure are doing your best.
You really did your best, in any case.

212
*Sign needs CV fix*

214
To think that Eucliwood haven't get better after a day...
To think that Eucliwood hasn't gotten better after a day...
*grammar*

221
Aikawa, did you feed oranges to Eucliwood?
Aikawa, have you been feeding mandarin skin to Eucliwood?
*bleh*

225
Orange piths are like poison to resident of the Underworld like us.
Mandarin piths are like poison to residents of the Underworld like us.

228
{sign} I hate the white parts of the orange.
{sign} White parts of the mandarin are my enemy.

229
But Eu {\i1}did{\i0} peeled off all the white parts.
But Eu {\i1}did{\i0} peel off all the white parts.

230
Still, there are tiny bits that you can't peeled away, correct?
Still, there are tiny bits that you just can't peel off, correct?

232
It's true that Eu has only been eating oranges all day.
It's true that Eu has only been eating refrigerated mandarins lately.
*changing the context a bit*

234
they develop a fever and marks will appear all over their body.
they'll develop a fever and marks will appear all over their body.
*Oh right, I'm a TLC*

237
orange's piths are also known as Adam and Eve's forbidden white pith.
an orange's pith is also known as Adam and Eve's forbidden white pith.

238
Forbidden white pith?
The forbidden white pith?

249
{sign}I don't want to make Ayumu worry anymore.
{sign}I don't want to make Ayumu worried any longer.

254
Its intention are still unknown.
Its intentions are still unknown.

256
No, don't take your eyes off of Ayumu.
No, don't take your eyes off Ayumu.


265
No. From what I know, she has to balance kelp around her head while doing a Y-balance and get punched in the tummy.
No. As far as I know, she should balance kelp on her head while doing a Y-balance and getting punched in the stomach.

270
If Eu say so herself...
If Eu says so herself...

273
No good. It hasn't disappear.
No good. It hasn't disappeared.

276
Or putting CD under your armpits and eating spinach?
And what about putting CDs under your armpits and eating spinach?

278
No good! I can't remember anymore!
No good! My brains stopped transmitting my wisdom!
*literal translation*

280
Who would've thought you'd actually got better.
Who would've thought you'd actually get better.
(sorry, I'm in an QC mood I guess)

334
{sign}Everyone knows it?
{sign}Common sense?
*literal*

349
{sign}Next Time
{sign}Next Time  "That ain't right. I'mma win!"
*usage of kansai-ben here*